NEWS RELEASE
January 16, 2009
For Immediate Release
ABC Real Estate
LOGAN, Utah- The ABC Real Estate, a company dealing with Beneficiary Directed Quity Land Trusts, has a new branch of investment opportunities in Cache Valley. “It is a great system of investment that generates great returns especially during economic recessions,” said Preston Parker, President of ABC Real Estate.
ABC Real Estate began their firm in August of 2008. Parker has two other companies using the same Trust system located in Southern California
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So I know you haven't gotten very far and so far what I see is good information but I think you should straight up talk about what the investors get out of investing in this company, as it is directed more towards them. You have a good quote and it looks like you're going in the right direction to back it up, I'm assuming after you talk about the two companies in Calif. you will talk about the 99% success rate. So just make sure you back it up and remember to focus on what the investors are going to get out of investing in this company.
ReplyDeleteGood opening paragraph, keep working on your second. Remember the stats he gave, and the investors as a main goal. Be confident, explain what you can on how the company works but get to the point. I Look forward to your final draft.
ReplyDeleteGood job on your first draft. In the short amount of time that we were given, I feel that you are on the right track with where you are going in your press release.In your opening sentence I would edit out the word "The" that creates your lead. I don't feel it necessary to use the word "the" , I think starting out your press release with "ABC Real Estate, a company..." would sound better. Other than that like I said intitially, I reason you are on the right track. Good job and way to adhere to AP style.
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